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Updated Friends and Allies Email Talking Points
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Phil Barnett Oct 20, 2015 8:44 PM
Here are slightly revised email talking points. They include Brian's edits and have a Heather-approved explanation of the sentence Mandy flagged. The revised sentence reads: "Her office on the 7th floor of the State Department was a secure facility that did not allow the use of mobile devices like blackberries and she did not have an office computer, so she didn’t use email when she was in her office."
Thanks, Phil
On Tue, Oct 20, 2015 at 12:36 PM, Mandy Grunwald <gruncom@aol.com> wrote:
I also think this is strong.
But I think you need to explain this sentence. The average person would be confused by the notion that her office didn't "allow for email use". thx
Her office on the 7th floor of the State Department did not allow for email use, so she seldom used email during the workday.
Mandy GrunwaldGrunwald Communications
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From: Brian Fallon <bfallon@hillaryclinton.com>
To: Sara Latham <slatham@hillaryclinton.com>
Cc: Phil Barnett <pbarnett@sb-atalaya.com>; Christina Reynolds <creynolds@hillaryclinton.com>; Cheryl Mills <cheryl.mills@gmail.com>; Jake Sullivan <jsullivan@hillaryclinton.com>; John Podesta <john.podesta@gmail.com>; Dan Schwerin <dschwerin@hillaryclinton.com>; Adrienne Elrod <aelrod@hillaryclinton.com>; Mandy Grunwald <gruncom@aol.com>; Philippe Reines <pir@hrcoffice.com>; David Kendall <dkendall@wc.com>; Katherine Turner <KTurner@wc.com>; Jennifer Palmieri <jpalmieri@hillaryclinton.com>; Phil Schiliro <pschiliro@sb-atalaya.com>; Matt Siegler <matt@sb-atalaya.com>; Heather Samuelson <hsamuelson@cdmillsgroup.com>
Sent: Tue, Oct 20, 2015 11:36 am
Subject: Re: Friends and Allies Email Talking Points
I think these are excellent, esp the rich details about emails sent on weekends and holidays.
My only suggested edit (attached) is to rephrase 'not a major user of email' (which to the ear sounds a little contradictory to our emphasis on turning over 55k pages) to something like 'did not rely on email for her day-to-day work'
On Tue, Oct 20, 2015 at 10:48 AM, Sara Latham <slatham@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
+ Fallon and Reynolds
On Tue, Oct 20, 2015 at 10:29 AM, Phil Barnett <pbarnett@sb-atalaya.com> wrote:
We took a shot at drafting talking points for friends and allies on emails. They are attached for your review.
Thanks,
Phil
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