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Re: CLOSE HOLD: HRC's remarks on Iran
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Eizenstat, Stuart Sep 6, 2015 6:38 PM
Dear Megan.
Thanks for the additional opportunity. Since I am at a family wedding outside St. Louis. I am unable to do line edits, as I did before. So permit me to make the following comments on what is genuinely an excellent speech.
First, the speech lacks a critical element; a clear statement that Hillary will use military force, if necessary, to deal with violations that threaten the agreement, not just the pablum that all options are on the table. Iran must know now what the consequences are of cheating. It does not mean this would be the first recourse.
Second, please add o the weapons sytems for Israel (I suggested the BBB and MOP): "And I will work with Congress to provide Israel with the weapons she needs to defend herself against any possible attack from Iran."
Third, add to the reference to Schumer. Senator Cardin (and Senator Menendez).
Fourth, add a reference in the Syrian section to expedite the very slow, disappointing vetting, training and arming of the opposition.
Fifth, in the references to "Death to America", "Death to Israel" to add to the gravity. This could come later in the speech when she refers with enphasis to the threat to Israel.
Thanks, again, for the opportunity to comment. This kind of subatantive speech is also the best antidote to the other diversions.
Best wishes,
Stu Eizenstat
Thanks for the additional opportunity. Since I am at a family wedding outside St. Louis. I am unable to do line edits, as I did before. So permit me to make the following comments on what is genuinely an excellent speech.
First, the speech lacks a critical element; a clear statement that Hillary will use military force, if necessary, to deal with violations that threaten the agreement, not just the pablum that all options are on the table. Iran must know now what the consequences are of cheating. It does not mean this would be the first recourse.
Second, please add o the weapons sytems for Israel (I suggested the BBB and MOP): "And I will work with Congress to provide Israel with the weapons she needs to defend herself against any possible attack from Iran."
Third, add to the reference to Schumer. Senator Cardin (and Senator Menendez).
Fourth, add a reference in the Syrian section to expedite the very slow, disappointing vetting, training and arming of the opposition.
Fifth, in the references to "Death to America", "Death to Israel" to add to the gravity. This could come later in the speech when she refers with enphasis to the threat to Israel.
Thanks, again, for the opportunity to comment. This kind of subatantive speech is also the best antidote to the other diversions.
Best wishes,
Stu Eizenstat
From: Megan Rooney [mailto:mrooney@hillaryclinton.com]
Sent: Sunday, September 06, 2015 03:06 PM
To: Eizenstat, Stuart; Laura Rosenberger <lrosenberger@hillaryclinton.com>
Subject: Re: CLOSE HOLD: HRC's remarks on Iran
Sent: Sunday, September 06, 2015 03:06 PM
To: Eizenstat, Stuart; Laura Rosenberger <lrosenberger@hillaryclinton.com>
Subject: Re: CLOSE HOLD: HRC's remarks on Iran
Amb. Eizenstat -- thanks again for your edits to the earlier version of this speech. It's been through a few iterations since then. Jake asked that I send you the latest version, in case you have time to look again... we'd really appreciate it.
You'll see a lot of the changes you suggested added here. If you see that we didn't take some change that you suggested and you feel strongly about it, please re-flag for me and I'll go back to Jake with it.
Thank you thank you!
On Wed, Sep 2, 2015 at 4:21 PM, Megan Rooney <mrooney@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
Amb. Eizenstat --I'm the speechwriter working on Secretary Clinton's remarks next week at Brookings on Iran. Jake asked me to send the draft to you for your thoughts. If you have any suggestions, large or small, we'd be very grateful.Could you send me your thoughts by 9am tomorrow at the latest?(Also, I know this goes without saying but please don't share this with anyone else.)Many thanks.