Re: DRAFT: Baton Rouge remarks

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Thanks, Lauren. Edits on health section added.

On Sun, Sep 20, 2015 at 9:42 AM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Hi everyone -

Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.

Holler with your edits.

Thanks!

Lauren

Ann O'Leary

Senior Policy Advisor

Hillary for America

Cell: 510-717-5518

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Hi everyone -

Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.

Holler with your edits.

Thanks!

Lauren

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Remarks aren't necessarily targeted at the Af Am community even though
our audience will be heavily Af Am as planned. Thinking this might be
a missed messaging opportunity.

Nevertheless, she'll be at a predominately Af Am educational
institution and very close to many other black educational
institutions. This is a great opportunity to talk about the
disparities in education, especially as it relates to the Af Am
community. Also, should give credit to this community which has
created a educational safety net for its Af Am children, one that
would not exist but for intentional efforts by people in this
community.

African American Outreach Director
Hillary for America
LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Lauren Peterson  wrote:
>
> Hi everyone -
>
> Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.
>
> Holler with your edits.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Lauren
>
> <2015-09-20 Draft Baton Rouge Event 1215pm.docx>

Thanks, everyone - incorporating edits right now, as well as some great suggestions that came in earlier from Marlon.

LaDavia, that is a great point - might you be able to point me in the direction of any numbers or specifics on the education disparities and the efforts of people in this community? If so, I think that could easily be added between the paragraphs about incarceration and child poverty.

On Sun, Sep 20, 2015 at 3:13 PM, LaDavia Drane <ldrane@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Remarks aren't necessarily targeted at the Af Am community even though
our audience will be heavily Af Am as planned. Thinking this might be
a missed messaging opportunity.

Nevertheless, she'll be at a predominately Af Am educational
institution and very close to many other black educational
institutions. This is a great opportunity to talk about the
disparities in education, especially as it relates to the Af Am
community. Also, should give credit to this community which has
created a educational safety net for its Af Am children, one that
would not exist but for intentional efforts by people in this
community.

African American Outreach Director
Hillary for America
LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
>
> Hi everyone -
>
> Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.
>
> Holler with your edits.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Lauren
>

> <2015-09-20 Draft Baton Rouge Event 1215pm.docx>

About to board another flight and won't have access to Internet. Adding Tony from research. Maybe his team can help.

African American Outreach Director

Hillary for America

LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

On Sep 20, 2015, at 3:20 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Thanks, everyone - incorporating edits right now, as well as some great suggestions that came in earlier from Marlon.

LaDavia, that is a great point - might you be able to point me in the direction of any numbers or specifics on the education disparities and the efforts of people in this community? If so, I think that could easily be added between the paragraphs about incarceration and child poverty.

On Sun, Sep 20, 2015 at 3:13 PM, LaDavia Drane <ldrane@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
Remarks aren't necessarily targeted at the Af Am community even though
our audience will be heavily Af Am as planned. Thinking this might be
a missed messaging opportunity.

Nevertheless, she'll be at a predominately Af Am educational
institution and very close to many other black educational
institutions. This is a great opportunity to talk about the
disparities in education, especially as it relates to the Af Am
community. Also, should give credit to this community which has
created a educational safety net for its Af Am children, one that
would not exist but for intentional efforts by people in this
community.

African American Outreach Director
Hillary for America
LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
>
> Hi everyone -
>
> Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.
>
> Holler with your edits.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Lauren
>

> <2015-09-20 Draft Baton Rouge Event 1215pm.docx>

Lauren - I'll connect with you off chain

Sent from my iPhone

On Sep 20, 2015, at 3:26 PM, LaDavia Drane <ldrane@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

About to board another flight and won't have access to Internet. Adding Tony from research. Maybe his team can help.

African American Outreach Director
Hillary for America
LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

On Sep 20, 2015, at 3:20 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Thanks, everyone - incorporating edits right now, as well as some great suggestions that came in earlier from Marlon.

LaDavia, that is a great point - might you be able to point me in the direction of any numbers or specifics on the education disparities and the efforts of people in this community? If so, I think that could easily be added between the paragraphs about incarceration and child poverty.

On Sun, Sep 20, 2015 at 3:13 PM, LaDavia Drane <ldrane@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
Remarks aren't necessarily targeted at the Af Am community even though
our audience will be heavily Af Am as planned. Thinking this might be
a missed messaging opportunity.

Nevertheless, she'll be at a predominately Af Am educational
institution and very close to many other black educational
institutions. This is a great opportunity to talk about the
disparities in education, especially as it relates to the Af Am
community. Also, should give credit to this community which has
created a educational safety net for its Af Am children, one that
would not exist but for intentional efforts by people in this
community.

African American Outreach Director
Hillary for America
LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
>
> Hi everyone -
>
> Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.
>
> Holler with your edits.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Lauren
>

> <2015-09-20 Draft Baton Rouge Event 1215pm.docx>

I strongly believe that we cannot say "When I hear other candidates talk about repealing the Affordable Care Act…"

We must be clear our argument is with Republicans who want repeal. This language will be read as an attack on Sanders and we are not there yet.

I'm tracking other comments and will send them soon.

Mandy Grunwald

Grunwald Communications

202 973-9400

-----Original Message-----
From: Ann O'Leary <aoleary@hillaryclinton.com>
To: Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com>
Cc: Speech Drafts <speechdrafts@hillaryclinton.com>; LaDavia Drane <ldrane@hillaryclinton.com>; Amanda Renteria <arenteria@hillaryclinton.com>; Brynne Craig <bcraig@hillaryclinton.com>; Mini Timmaraju <mtimmaraju@hillaryclinton.com>; Karen Finney <kfinney@hillaryclinton.com>
Sent: Sun, Sep 20, 2015 2:35 pm
Subject: Re: DRAFT: Baton Rouge remarks

Thanks, Lauren. Edits on health section added.

On Sun, Sep 20, 2015 at 9:42 AM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Hi everyone -

Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.

Holler with your edits.

Thanks!

Lauren

Ann O'Leary

Senior Policy Advisor

Hillary for America

Cell: 510-717-5518

Also - can we talk about CHIP & any stats on AA kids who now have
healthcare because of it?


Sent from my iPhone

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Lauren Peterson  wrote:
>
> Hi everyone -
>
> Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.
>
> Holler with your edits.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Lauren
>
> <2015-09-20 Draft Baton Rouge Event 1215pm.docx>

A few small things.

Instead of “filling prescriptions or paying rent.” How about “ no one should have to choose between paying for medicine they need and paying their rent. “

And this phrase: which causes negative health outcomes –

I don’t think most people in America have any idea what that means. Can we put that into real terms for what we’re talking about for people there?

From: speechdrafts@hillaryclinton.com [mailto:speechdrafts@hillaryclinton.com] On Behalf Of LaDavia Drane
Sent: Sunday, September 20, 2015 9:27 PM
To: Lauren Peterson
Cc: Speech Drafts; Amanda Renteria; Brynne Craig; Mini Timmaraju; Karen Finney; Tony Carrk
Subject: Re: DRAFT: Baton Rouge remarks

About to board another flight and won't have access to Internet. Adding Tony from research. Maybe his team can help.

African American Outreach Director

Hillary for America

LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

On Sep 20, 2015, at 3:20 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Thanks, everyone - incorporating edits right now, as well as some great suggestions that came in earlier from Marlon.

LaDavia, that is a great point - might you be able to point me in the direction of any numbers or specifics on the education disparities and the efforts of people in this community? If so, I think that could easily be added between the paragraphs about incarceration and child poverty.

On Sun, Sep 20, 2015 at 3:13 PM, LaDavia Drane <ldrane@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Remarks aren't necessarily targeted at the Af Am community even though
our audience will be heavily Af Am as planned. Thinking this might be
a missed messaging opportunity.

Nevertheless, she'll be at a predominately Af Am educational
institution and very close to many other black educational
institutions. This is a great opportunity to talk about the
disparities in education, especially as it relates to the Af Am
community. Also, should give credit to this community which has
created a educational safety net for its Af Am children, one that
would not exist but for intentional efforts by people in this
community.

African American Outreach Director
Hillary for America
LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
>
> Hi everyone -
>
> Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.
>
> Holler with your edits.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Lauren
>

> <2015-09-20 Draft Baton Rouge Event 1215pm.docx>

Also would change one last thing Just get rid of the Republican hit in this one = The point is stronger without. It. :

This : Lindsey Graham said: “Hillary Clinton has list a mile long to help the middle class,” and the Republicans don’t have anything at all. He’s darn right about that. It was the most honest thing anyone said all night.

To this:

Lindsey Graham said: “Hillary Clinton has list a mile long to help the middle class. ” He’s darn right about that. And that was the most honest thing any Republican candidate

said all night.

About to board another flight and won't have access to Internet. Adding Tony from research. Maybe his team can help.

African American Outreach Director

Hillary for America

LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

On Sep 20, 2015, at 3:20 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Thanks, everyone - incorporating edits right now, as well as some great suggestions that came in earlier from Marlon.

LaDavia, that is a great point - might you be able to point me in the direction of any numbers or specifics on the education disparities and the efforts of people in this community? If so, I think that could easily be added between the paragraphs about incarceration and child poverty.

On Sun, Sep 20, 2015 at 3:13 PM, LaDavia Drane <ldrane@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:

Remarks aren't necessarily targeted at the Af Am community even though
our audience will be heavily Af Am as planned. Thinking this might be
a missed messaging opportunity.

Nevertheless, she'll be at a predominately Af Am educational
institution and very close to many other black educational
institutions. This is a great opportunity to talk about the
disparities in education, especially as it relates to the Af Am
community. Also, should give credit to this community which has
created a educational safety net for its Af Am children, one that
would not exist but for intentional efforts by people in this
community.

African American Outreach Director
Hillary for America
LDrane@hillaryclinton.com

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Lauren Peterson <lpeterson@hillaryclinton.com> wrote:
>
> Hi everyone -
>
> Attached is a draft for tomorrow's organizing event in Baton Rouge. It's a version of the latest stump speech, but with more health care, a jab at Jindal, a shout out to POTUS this weekend at Marlon's suggestion, and some messaging around racial disparities.
>
> Holler with your edits.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Lauren
>

> <2015-09-20 Draft Baton Rouge Event 1215pm.docx>