RE: TIR /Hamilton TIR Feedback --- UNCLASSIFIED//FOUO

Hi -

Attached is the TIR for .

Thanks,

Who peer reviewed it?

A/SIA
FBI New York I ID-13
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Hi

I was not aware we were sending TIRs to be peer reviewed?

Yes, all products get peer reviewed. That was why at our last meeting I asked everyone to add the peer reviewer to the email when you send the products to me or it would get sent back. I only started sending them back last week. However, I have taken a look at this one anyway in comparison to the Roderic Hamilton TIR, so these two don't worry about it. But in future please have someone peer review them before sending them to me.

Hamilton TIR Feedback

• Needs work or needs to be combined with others. There is not enough in this TIR to justify a key findings TIR. It is just simply a summary of your database results. You could not find a connection the subject or derogatory information and you should have at least one. If you have others like this take a look at them together and see if they can be combined. At the very least one TIR could be written to indicate they were potential witnesses with no discernable connections to the defendant and list the defendant.

• You are still writing the TIR like you are summarizing you database results. The TIR format is lead sentence (key finding statement) and supporting bullets ( evidence to support your key finding). Stop using sub-bullets unless absolutely necessary.

• Each evidence bullet requires in-text citations which always include, at minimum the date and source type. If a human source is used then you much include access as well/. Don't but the date researched in the lead sentence, since the lead sentence should mirror your key findings. You can add context, but not the information that goes in the bullet. There is no substitute for that.

• In your pare ethical citation you need to include the search criteria for the TECS information, per the guidance.

TIR Feedback

• Much of the same formatting feedback from above.

EFTA00174298

• Much better than Hamilton. There are at least connections in this to the defendant. This one can stand alone with a second bullet on the first key finding.

• Per the style guide you need at least two bullets to substantiate your key findings, no more than five.

• How is your second question relevant to the case? Your questions on the Hamilton TIR were much better and can be used on each of these.

I know you said you have several of these. Based on the amount ofinformation you've gathered on each and the type of information gathered some of these may need to be combined and some can stand alone. We will have to determine on a case by case basis. Let me know if you have any questions.

A/SIA
FBI New York | ID-13
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