Re: Max's Essay for your review

Dear Jeffrey,<=span>

Attached is Ma='s essay as requested.

Please let me =now your thoughts.

Thank you.

not good at all.---boring„ not well organized,,, limited vocab, read it„ do you find =t interesting„ imagine the guy/girl reading it after reading 200 others„ he will put it down without going through it.

This is all ne= to me as my children are only 11& 13.

I read through=the Essay prior to sending it to you and I agree with you.

What specifica=ly do most colleges look for with regard to "content" ( after your e-mail I understand that the =ssay should provoke great interest to the reader)?

Perhaps I need=to understand the "purpose" of "The Essay"?

it is the most important thing , every kid that applies has maxs grades„ t=e essay seperates wheat from chaff. , it could be funny, original, fantasy=. you should read it, and say to your wife„ here read this its great